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It's a luke-warm evening and 3 friends are standing outside of an older brick walled building. They are standing facing a ladder meant for maintenance purposes.

BOY: (takes a deep breath) Okay, let's do this.

GIRL 1: You don't have to be nervous! It's not like we're doing anything bad...

BOY: Well, it's not like we're helping out the community by doing this either!

GIRL 1: Do you want me to go first?

BOY: No, I want to do it! (he tries to swallow his nerves) I'm just a little bit nervous because I know that if anything bad happens I'll be the one getting in trouble and you guy's will get away..

GIRL 2: Y'know, if I get caught this will go on my personal record, since I'm 18 and all.

GIRL 1: Nothing is going to happen.

GIRL 2: Are you going to bring the blankets up?

(The boy slowly starts to climb the rusty ladder)

GIRL 1: I'll throw them up when he gets up there.

(The boy gets to the top and disappears for a few seconds. Girl 1 throws the blankets up and starts climbing. Girl 2 doesn't wait for Girl 1 to get to the top before she starts climbing.)

(When they get to the top they all automatically bend over and shuffle along the gravelly rooftop to the edge which overlooks main street. The clock tower, subway, hair salon, and cafe are to the left. The bank, pawnshop, flower shop, and theater to the right.)

BOY: Whoa (the Boy whispers)

(Girl 1 takes a look over the edge and spots 2 women in their 20's power walking down the sidewalk with strollers in front of them)

GIRL 1: I'm going to spit my gum at them! (she whispers)

GIRL 2: Don't be stupid!

BOY: Yeah! Now that's just asking for us to get caught...

GIRL 1: Fine then! (she moves away from the ledge and away from the boy's side and back to wear Girl 2 is lying looking at the stars. She puts her head on her stomach and the threesome is quiet.)

BOY: (he whispers) If I could just stop this one moment in time it would be a picture of that (he screws up his face and makes a frame with his outstretched hands) and this feeling I have right now.

(Girl 2 giggles at something Girl 1 whispered to her which makes Girl 2's stomach jiggle which also jiggles Girl 1's head which makes Girl 1 giggle too. Neither of them heard what the Boy said but it doesn't phase him as he keeps looking at the street and the drizzle of late night drivers and coffee drinkers.)

GIRL 2: (there's a lull in the 'girl' talk and her attention is brought back to the boy) We need to find you someone. (there's a pause)

GIRL 1: Yeah..sometimes I feel bad that I'm always in a relationship and you're not.

(The boy is still looking out on the street and he spots a police car)

BOY: Get down! (he whispers harshly and bends forward in an awkward position.)

GIRL 1: What?

BOY: It was a police car! (he starts shaking from a mix of adrenaline and nervousness. He slowly crawls his way to the back of the building)

GIRL 2: Which way did they go?

BOY: They drove right beside us!

GIRL 1: They're gone now.

BOY: Let's go before

GIRL 2: I can go down first.

(Girl 2 hesitantly turns around and with her foot looks for the first rung. She finds it and starts going down. Girl 1 starts climbing. By the time the Boy starts his decent both of them are at the bottom. Talking to each other. When the Boy gets to the bottom they start walking away. The Boy smiles to himself.)

GIRL 2: My friend got arrested the other day.

GIRL 1: What for?

GIRL 2: She was cutting flowers off of people's lawn and she made a pretty bouquet! Somehow the police heard about it and arrested her for trespassing with a weapon.

GIRL 1: That's bizarre.

BOY: (he whispers) If I were making an autobiography that would be in it. (The girls don't notice as they are a few steps ahead and are engrossed in each other. The Boy continues on smiling and walking behind them.)
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Based on real life events! I think I've only written one screenplay in my life so please, any help (with formatting/grammar/dialogue) is extremely appreciated!

I was trying to convey how the little things in life are the things that really matter. And this was one of the moments in my life that I think really mattered.
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That gave me a warm feeling inside. :aww: I love rooftops. Then again, how can anyone not? Literally being "on top of the world" and looking down is an amazing feeling. I loved every time you described the view of the city; I could picture it perfectly.

"Well, it's not like we're helping out the community by doing this either!" :giggle: That made me giggle.

Maybe you could emphasize the hesitation and nervousness in the beginning. The boy's third line felt a little lacking. To me, it seems like his saying "No, I want to do it," would be firm and almost demanding (as if trying to prove to them, and himself, that he's tough enough to do it), but then his voice would weaken once he admits, "I'm just a little bit nervous..." Maybe show the same kind of weakness in Girl 2, like have her gulp or something in the middle of stating that it could go on her permanent record. Just a few suggestions. :)

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I've had a thing for roof tops ever since I figured out I could climb out of my window and onto our house's roof. I've spent many a sleepless nights hanging out there!

Good idea about emphasizing the boy's tension and terror! The thing is, in real life Girl 2 didn't sound nervous at all when she stated it would go on her record. Thanks for the help though! :hug:
Awesome! That sounds fun. My window is right beside our roof, but it's too high up for me to reach - it's above a shelf. I actually broke the shelf after climbing on it and trying to sneak out the window with two of my girlfriends once. :paranoid:

Anytime! :hug:

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Ahahaha! What a wonderful story! Where were you kids going to go though? :giggle:
We wanted to TP a friend who lives nearby. Obviously, we didn't get far. :lol:

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Hello there

Thank you for your submission to the One Act Scriptwriting contest.

This is just a confirmation that your entry has been received and follows the contest rules. Therefore it will be judged after the 4th August 2008 for the competition.

Thank you and good luck!

Becca

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I had a lot of fun doing this! Thanks for creating a contest that pushed me to try new things! :)
Haha! You're just as mature as I am :slow:
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